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发表于 2006-5-14 00:03 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
我看着原文,然后照着杨先生的格式来译的,韵脚也没敢改。怕自己改了在格式上做不好。前一段时间是摸底考试,连着三个星期没有放假,所以一直抽不出时间!

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牧人柯瑞东热恋着漂亮的阿荔吉,
那已是主人的宠儿,所以他只能白费心力。
他经常到那浓荫的榉树林里,
在那儿一个人空怀着单相思,
向山林抛出杂乱无章的诗辞:
啊!残忍的少年,你一点也不爱我的歌?
也不可怜我么?你要将我推向死亡的边缘么?
现在即使牛羊也在寻找树荫和凉爽,
就是苍翠的蜥蜴也在荆榛里躲藏,
为了炎暑中疲倦的收割人,塞斯提丽
也正在调合葱和茴香的芳香的药汁,
但我却还在你留过足迹的地方游荡,
在熔融的太阳下,嘶哑的蝉声在丛林回响。
我好不好去忍受忧郁的阿玛瑞梨的脾气
和她那骄傲的态度?或者找梅那伽也可以?
虽然他的皮肤黑黝,而你的皮肤白皙,
啊,漂亮的少年,不要太相信你的容采,
白女贞花飘落满地,黑复盆子被收集起来。
你轻贱我,阿荔吉,我从不在意你对我的戏问
有多少牲口财富,有多少雪白的奶汁,
我在西西里的山中游牧着一千头牛羊,
鲜奶泛上了陶罐的边纹,这些都无论寒冬炎暑;
我还擅长歌曲,和那狄尔刻泉的安菲翁
在海岸边的阿拉金都山唤着牛羊异曲同工。
我并不是多病之貌,那天在水边我看了一下,
当水平如镜的时候;并且我从不怕
跟达芙尼相比,如我的影子不骗我的话。
啊,你跟我到卑陋的乡村去吧,
住在平凡的茅舍里以猎鹿为生涯,
你可以挥动木槿的绿叶来赶着迟缓的群羊,
在那里的树林中跟我学着山神歌唱;
(山神最初发明用蜡把芦管编在一起,
他是照顾羊群和一切牧羊人的)。
你也不要怕你的娇唇会被芦纹割破,
要知道为了身似阿敏塔什么都肯作。
我有一个用七根芦管编成的排笙,
那是过去达摩埃塔临死以前所赠,
他死时说过,“它现在有你可以继承”;
达摩埃塔说的,愚蠢的阿敏塔就会妒忌我。
还有在一个崎岖的崖谷里我曾经发现
一对小羚羊,它们毛上还带着白斑,
每天两次吃母羊的奶,我本来要为你保留,
但是塞斯提丽也说过要拿走的,
让她拿走好了,既然你轻视我的拥有。
来吧,漂亮的孩子,看,那些山林的女神
带来了满篮的百合花,那纤白的水中精灵
也给你采来淡紫的泽兰和含苞欲放的罂粟,
把芬芳的茴香花和水仙花也结成一束,
还把决明花和其他的香草都编在一起,
金黄的野菊使平凡的复盆子焕发了美丽,
开着又白又软的花的榅桲子我也可奉送,
与我过去的阿玛瑞梨所爱的栗子一同,
还要加上蜡李,(让这种果子至少也享有尊荣)。
你,月桂,我也要采,还有长春花在旁,
这样放在一起让它们放出混合的芬香。
柯瑞东,你真笨,阿荔吉并不要爱人奉赐,
就算比赛礼物你也比不过伊奥拉斯。
哎呀,所有的痛苦,都要降临我的脑海么?
让野猪弄污了清泉,让南风吹落了花朵。
连神人也住在山林,你痴了吗,为什么要跑?
特洛亚的巴利斯也住过,让帕拉斯住在她的城堡,
但是我们认为山林比任何地方都好。
眈眈的狮子追逐着狼,狼又追逐着羊,
而戏跃的山羊则又追寻着繁花的丁香,
柯瑞东依旧追求着阿荔吉,万物都有各自的欲望。
看啊,耕牛已开始回家,牛轭把犁悬起,
欲坠的夕阳伸展着它们的影子,
但爱恋还在将我燃烧,又有谁能使相思小憩?
啊,柯瑞东,柯瑞东,究竟什么使你迷乱?
在那茂盛的榆树上你的葡萄才挂了一半,
你难道不能从事一些有益的生活?
用那柳条或芦草编个篮子减轻你的失落?
如果那人讨厌你,就去寻找新的阿荔吉吧。
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发表于 2006-5-14 19:24 | 只看该作者
不行啊,sych,这个与杨的译文几乎一模一样!:(
再改改吧,时间不是问题~~等着你
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发表于 2006-5-15 18:03 | 只看该作者
我有一个非常粗的稿,是最初牧先生说我翻第二首时做的(后来牧牧调皮,要我改(行)嫁(接)第四篇,搞到今天还在挣扎)。如果你要,可以给你参考。
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第四篇是最考验人的哦~~`内容也最精彩~一般人还得考虑能不能胜任的~~
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一下就把小我烤焦了。实话说,这段时间(借口不问题)实在没有给心机,不是不负“酒”,你批我吧,保证态度好。
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发表于 2006-5-15 23:37 | 只看该作者
很久以前译的粗胚,后来没有再看过。准确性基本没有问题,词句可以而且应该改。。。如果谁能用上,也算是贡献一把了。

ALEXIS
the shepherd Corydon with love was fired
for fair Alexis, his own master's joy:
no room for hope had he, yet, none the less,
the thick-leaved shadowy-soaring beech-tree grove
still would he haunt, and there alone, as thus,
to woods and hills pour forth his artless strains.
THE shepherd Corydon burned for fair Alexis, his master's darling, and found no hope: only among the thick shady-topped beeches he would continually come, and there alone utter in idle passion these artless words to the hills and woods.
牧人考瑞登爱火如焚
为着俊美的埃利克斯思,他主人的心爱
全然无望,然而
他不断逡巡于叶茂荫密的櫸丛
对着山峦和树木抒发无章的心声

“Cruel Alexis, heed you naught my songs?
Have you no pity? you'll drive me to my death.

O cruel Alexis, carest thou naught for my songs? hast no pity on us? thou wilt be my death at the last.

噢忍心的埃利克斯思,难道你一点也不为我的歌所动?难道你毫无仁慈?我迟早会为你煎熬而死。

Now even the cattle court the cooling shade
and the green lizard hides him in the thorn:
now for tired mowers, with the fierce heat spent,
pounds Thestilis her mess of savoury herbs,
wild thyme and garlic. I, with none beside,
save hoarse cicalas shrilling through the brake,
still track your footprints 'neath the broiling sun.

Now even the cattle woo the shade and coolness, now even the green lizards hide in the thorn brakes; and Thestylis is bruising garlic and wild thyme, strong-smelling herbs for the mowers wearied with the fierce heat: but for all my company, as I trace thy footsteps, the copses ring with crickets jarring under the blazing sun.

眼下牛羊都循了阴凉的庇护
绿色的蜥蜴藏身于肋棘
连乡间少女苔丝提里丝都在为炎日下精疲力竭的割草人
舂碾美味的大蒜,野百里香和药草
而我形影孑孓
炽烈日头中独寻你的足影
只得灌木丛里
蝉儿刺耳嘶鸣

Better have borne the petulant proud disdain
of Amaryllis, or Menalcas wooed,
albeit he was so dark, and you so fair!
Trust not too much to colour, beauteous boy;
white privets fall, dark hyacinths are culled.斯

Was it not better to bear Amaryllis with all her sour displeasures and haughty scorns? or Menalcas, though he were dark, though thou wert white? O fair boy, trust not overmuch to colour; creamy privet-blossoms fall, dark hyacinths are gathered.

或许更容易忍受阿玛瑞丽丝
和她小性子傲慢的轻蔑, 或是恳求麦拿可斯,
即使他黝黑,而你如此白皙?
噢俊美的少年,不要过于依仗肤色
乳白的女贞花朵漂落,而紫蓝的风信子被采摘

You scorn me, Alexis, who or what I am
care not to ask--how rich in flocks, or how
in snow-white milk abounding: yet for me
roam on Sicilian hills a thousand lambs;
summer or winter, still my milk-pails brim.

I am scorned of thee, nor dost thou ask what I am, Alexis, how rich in flocks, how abounding in snowy milk. A thousand lambs of mine wander on Sicilian hills: fresh milk fails me not at midsummer nor in the frost.

你心中无我,埃利克斯思,也无意询问
我是谁,作什么—有多少牛羊,有否雪白不竭的奶。
西西里山峦上我的千只羊儿漫游
盛夏或寒冬中我的奶桶常满

I sing as erst Amphion of Circe sang,
what time he went to call his cattle home
on Attic Aracynthus. Nor am I
so ill to look on: lately on the beach
I saw myself, when winds had stilled the sea,
and, if that mirror lie not, would not fear
daphnis to challenge, though yourself were judge.

I sing as he was wont when be called his oxen home, Amphion of Dirce in Actaean Aracynthus. Neither am I so foul to view: of late I saw myself on the shore, when the sea stood in windless calm; I will not fear Daphnis in thy judgment, if the mirror cannot lie.

我的歌喉犹如色赛的阿姆皮昂
召唤他的牛群归去雅典的阿若辛忒斯
我的相貌也不凡,那天在海滩
无风平静的海里照见自己
如果那镜子没有撒谎
我不惧岱费尼斯的挑战
当然你是最终的评判

Ah! were you but content with me to dwell.
Some lowly cot in the rough fields our home,
shoot down the stags, or with green osier-wand
round up the straggling flock!

Ah that thou wouldst but care to be with me in the rough country, to dwell in low cots, to shoot the deer, or drive a flock of kids to the green mallow bed.

阿!你会否情愿与我燕居
在荒抚乡村简陋的窝棚
射猎鹿儿,或以青绿柳条
集拢散落的羊群

There you with me
in silvan strains will learn to rival Pan.
Pan first with wax taught reed with reed to join;
for sheep alike and shepherd Pan hath care.
Nor with the reed's edge fear you to make rough
your dainty lip; such arts as these to learn
what did Amyntas do?--what did he not?
With me in the woods together thou shalt copy Pan in singing; Pan first taught to join with wax the row of reeds: Pan is guardian if the sheep and of the shepherds. Nor let it repent thee to run thy tender lip along the reeds: to know this same art what did Amyntas leave undone?
山林中你我将唱
可与潘比美的乐歌
潘最早用蜡将芦管并排粘起
他会守护羊群一如牧人
你不会后悔芦笛逡裂你柔嫩的唇
学习阿敏忒斯把握的和没能把握的
A pipe have I, of hemlock-stalks compact
in lessening lengths, Damoetas' dying-gift:
‘Mine once,’ quoth he, ‘now yours, as heir to own.’
Foolish Amyntas heard and envied me.

I have a pipe joined of seven unequal hemlock-stalks, a gift that Damoetas once gave me, and said as he died: Now hath it thee for second master. Damoetas said it: stupid Amyntas was jealous.

我有一支七干参差铁杉的管笛
戴默哀塔斯死前留给我
“曾是我的,现在作为遗物给你”,他说
傻傻的阿敏忒斯听到好生羡慕

Ay, and two fawns, I risked my neck to find
in a steep glen, with coats white-dappled still,
from a sheep's udders suckled twice a day--
these still I keep for you; which Thestilis
implores me oft to let her lead away;
and she shall have them, since my gifts you spurn.

Furthermore two fawns, and in a perilous ravine I found them, with skin even yet white-dappled, drain a ewe's udders twice a day; and I keep them for thee. This long time Thestylis begs them to take away from me, and she shall, since our gifts are graceless in thine eyes.

还有阿,那两只我冒死寻回的禽鸟
羽毛上有白色斑点
每天两次饮母羊的奶—
留给你,而苔丝提里丝
常追着要我给她
她会如愿吧,因你蔑视我的礼物

Come hither, beauteous boy; for you the Nymphs
bring baskets, see, with lilies brimmed; for you,
plucking pale violets and poppy-heads,
now the fair Naiad, of narcissus flower
and fragrant fennel, doth one posy twine--
with cassia then, and other scented herbs,
blends them, and sets the tender hyacinth off
with yellow marigold. I too will pick
quinces all silvered-o'er with hoary down,
chestnuts, which Amaryllis wont to love,
and waxen plums withal: this fruit no less
shall have its meed of honour; and I will pluck
you too, ye laurels, and you, ye myrtles, near,
for so your sweets ye mingle.

Come hither, O fair boy; for thee lo! the Nymphs bring baskets full of lilies; for thee the white Naiad plucks pale violets and poppy heads, and adds the narcissus and the fragrant anise-flower, and entwining them with casia and other sweet-scented herbs, spangles soft hyacinth-posies with yellow marigold. Myself will gather quinces with delicate silvery bloom, and the chestnuts that my Amaryllis loved, and waxen plums withal: this fruit likewise shall have his honour: and you will I pluck, O laurels, and thee, bordering myrtle, since so set you mingle your fragrant sweets.

来吧,俊美的少年;看那,为你
山泽仙女带来满篮的百合
为你,美丽的纳阿雅德采集
紫罗兰和罂粟花蕾,
还有水仙和芳香的茴香
掺着桂花及其他香气扑鼻的药草
点缀以柔软的风信子和黄色的金盏花
缠成花束。
而我会采灰色晨曦中银白的榲桲
和阿玛瑞丽丝喜爱的栗子
还有蜡质晶莹的李子:
这些果实也有应得的回报
我将采摘你,哦,你的月桂,和你
还有邻近的你的爱神木
因你如此调合你芬芳的甘甜

。。Corydon,
you are a boor, nor heeds a whit your gifts
alexis; no, nor would Iollas yield,
should gifts decide the day. Alack! alack!
What misery have I brought upon my head!--
loosed on the flowers Siroces to my bane,
and the wild boar upon my crystal springs!
Thou art a country boor, O Corydon! nor does Alexis heed thy gifts: nor if the contest be of gifts may Iollas yield to thee. Alas, alas, what have I brought on my luckless head? I have loosed the tempest on my blossoms, woe's me, and the wild boars on my crystal springs.
考瑞登阿,你是个乡下佬
埃利克斯思不会青睐你的礼物
即便礼物有什么作用
是爱欧拉斯也不会接受
嗳嗳,我自寻了何等的煎熬
悲哀的我,让暴风毁灭了花儿
野猪践踏了清泉


Whom do you fly, infatuate? gods ere now,
and Dardan Paris, have made the woods their home.
Let Pallas keep the towers her hand hath built,
us before all things let the woods delight.

From whom fliest thou, ah infatuate? Gods likewise have dwelt in the woodland, and Paris of Dardania. Pallas may keep by herself the fortresses that she built: us before all else let the woodland satisfy.

你要逃离谁阿,我迷恋的人儿?
神祗同达答尼亚的帕里斯,
都将山林作了家
让帕拉斯兀自守着她建的城堡
让我们首先在山林里尽欢

The grim-eyed lioness pursues the wolf,
the wolf the she-goat, the she-goat herself
in wanton sport the flowering cytisus,
and Corydon Alexis, each led on
by their own longing. See, the ox comes home
with plough up-tilted, and the shadows grow
to twice their length with the departing sun,
yet me love burns, for who can limit love?

The grim lioness pursues the wolf, the wolf in turn the she-goat; the wanton she-goat pursues the flowering cytisus; as Corydon does thee, O Alexis, each drawn by his own delight. See, the bullocks return with the ploughs tilted from the yoke, and the sinking sun doubles the lengthening shadows: yet me love burns; for what bound may be set to love?

炯炯的母狮追逐狼
而狼追逐母羊,母羊
任情涉猎盛放的丁香
一如考瑞登追随你,埃利克斯思
各为渴望所驱  看那,
耕牛已负犁在归途
夕阳西沉,影儿也拉得双倍的长:
而爱烧灼着我
因为爱无法被设限

Ah! Corydon, Corydon, what hath crazed your wit?
Your vine half-pruned hangs on the leafy elm;
why haste you not to weave what need requires
of pliant rush or osier? Scorned by this,
elsewhere some new Alexis you will find.”
Ah Corydon, Corydon, what madness has caught thee? thy vine hangs half unpruned on her leaf-laden elm. Nay but rather at least something of all that daily work needs, set thou to weave of osiers or soft rushes: if he disdains thee, thou wilt find another Alexis.
嗳,考瑞登,考瑞登,是什么迷了你的心智?
你尚未修剪完的葡萄藤
垂在长满了叶子的榆树上
至少也要区编织的软心草和柳条
埃利克斯思瞧不上你
别处你会找到新欢
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谢谢啦~
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翻译得太好了,真的。自叹弗如!
sych可以参考一下的~
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牧牧,谢谢你的鼓励,你实在是太仁慈慷慨。

最近一直在出差,今天晚上回来,明天再上路,又是一个星期。还没有来得及整理翻译版,更没有施行自己最近打算每个星期多多少少要译一篇的计划。

万祈见谅。
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