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这是发表在Original Literature 的学术讨论帖子，也是认真的在为发表在这里的原创作品的进行提高的建议讨论。
有请站长公布删贴者的身份，和她操作的理由，谢谢：））
Discussing English Poetry with JoycelynXu
<!!!> Why is this posting being deleted without justification?
A Cool Autumn Night
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JoycelynXu 2006-9-10 02:28
One brand-new night, the sky
Was veiled in black without
The moon or stars inset,
And the road reflecting the dim light,
Leaving trees shining in green and bright.
This was a classical painting of night
Composing of dynamic characters
And the static pure scene.
Riding around the holy palace;
Listening to lovely schoolmates’ talks;
Breathing a fresh breath in depth;
Indulging myself into the scenery enjoyment;
Singing an excited song for all.
This was a cool autumn night in early September,
On the novel campus I haven’t been ever,
The memorable feeling engraved forever.
问好
这看到了，一个汉文的思考，写出来的英文诗。。。
(This piece is an example of how a passage is penned with a Chinese poetic-semantic structure, thus it look strange in the eyes of native English reader. I will demonstrate how modern English shall treat the poetic setting provided by the originator.)
I am an overseas Chinese in Singapore....
Let's say I wore both shoes before:))
A Cool Autumn Night
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Kokho 2006-9-20 03:17 PM
The veil of stars and moon,
vanished; But the freshness of the dark sky,
remains...
witnessed by the green and bright shine
of a road as dark!
The statics of silence, thus
paint the character of the night.
Chatters from distance
are exhales from the deep affinity
for the tranquility of the moment...
rhythm is echoed and melody lost!
Exacting the parting
of summer
I inhale September...
:)) 我把你想说的给诗化了。。。
拿给你的英文老师看看，你就会明白的。 |
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